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Over eleven years ago,
People fell from towers in the sky,
Quite a few we knew and loved.
Rescued were some, but many died.
So devasted were we all,
Television broadcasts were played all day.
Until we began to recover,
Very many of us would stay this way.
Why did this have to happen?
X-Small were the rooms that "sheltered" the men,
Yet they could not truly escape.
Zoo animals had more space than those in the tower pen.
And yet we try to forget.
Battles were fought, but not much justice served.
Couldn't anybody tell?
Don't those people need to get what they deserved?
Even though many will try not to remember,
Far more than memories were given to us.
Going out of our way to protect the innocent,
Hey, you won't see us give a fuss.
It's engraved in us all,
Just search deep within.
Killing is never a good answer.
Love is what we were given.
Many letters, ten to be true.
Nine-Eleven changed me and you.
Okay, this is the second poem I've written in my new form, Alphabetical. In case you don't know, Alphabeticals are written using letters from the alphabet to guide what you start each line with. You can start with any letter, for instance "L", and work your way down alphabetically. If your first line is "Let's party," then, since that starts with L, your next line has to start with "M", like "My house is available". Get it? Good. This time I didn't write in completely in couplets, I wrote in 6 quartets, rhyming pattern ABCB (which I never usually do) if you couldn't tell, and then a rhyming couplet at the end. This is to show you can write in Alphabeticals can be written in any rhyme scheme, or no rhyme scheme (which would, I admit, make it less impressive), and still be an Alphabetical.
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NextBestseller1 Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I like how even though the letters were restrictive with what you could start each line with, you were able to keep it as one cohesive poem that makes sense and has meaning. It's nice that you don't throw random nonsense thoughts that don't fit with the theme of the poem like most people would do. Great work!
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DecreeB Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, that means a lot. I try to stay as on topic as possible even with my restrictions :). It can be tough, though. Personally, even though this is okay, I think every other poem I've written is better, but this probably has the most meaning to it. Thanks you very much for the feedback.
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NextBestseller1 Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Anytime ^_^
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Darkerhaze Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Student General Artist
Pretty cool :) I like it!
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DecreeB Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks. I personally thing this is my worst poem (not saying it's bad, just saying others are better). Your feedback means a lot.
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Darkerhaze Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2012  Student General Artist
well, I liked it... ill check out some of your other stuff tho :)
I doubt this is your worst though...
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DecreeB Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Awesome, thanks. And, despite being new to poetry, I think it is my worst :)
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Darkerhaze Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2012  Student General Artist
poetry is so amazing.. it's gotten me through so much.. :P
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